Recital

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7/2/2024

First Place (shared) / "Same Poem, Different Form Poetry Contest" sponsored by Crystol Woods.

Recital / free verse / Pride Expectation rushes in As her silent walk begins All eyes staring Watching for a hint of emotion But none revealed As she takes her place among the muses No one breathes as her studious eyes Examine the two-dimensional codes Then silence breaks As both hands spring into fantastical dance On an ever changing ivory and ebony stage Mellifluous tones, conspicuously full and rich, Transport all on an uplifting emotional journey Ears, minds, hearts and lungs Feasting on delicious pabulum of spirit Soon tortuous movements diminish The fantastical dance declines With final notes Striking harmonious chords Deep into our psyche Our ethereal journey ends And we gently land where we began She pauses, then rises To a cacophony of applause All eyes staring Watching for a hint of emotion as she exits But none revealed Save a quick glance & brief smile Acknowledging her proud parent's pounding hearts Misting eyes and beaming faces Recital / tanka / Pride smooth operator flawless rhapsody in blue climax conclusion cacophony of applause with proud parents’ pounding hearts

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Crystol Woods

Date: 7/5/2024 7:21:00 AM

Yessss!!!! This!!! Congratulations Mark, for 1st place win! I adore this poem. I was taken to this recital and sitting in the audience, I felt and saw and heard every breathless moment. Not only a touching poem but so well written, I found myself holding my breath until finally...applause! And yes, I too clapped! Awesome tanka as well... challenging form especially when changing from a free verse! A+++! Xo

Crystol Woods
Date: 7/5/2024 3:58:00 PM

You're welcome Mark... you earned it! <3

Mark Toney
Date: 7/5/2024 7:46:00 AM

Crystol, I really appreciate your gracious and enthusiastic comments. You’ve made my day! Our friends’ daughter was going to give her first piano recital and we were invited. Our being invited to the recital was a spur of the moment thing, but experiencing it with her parents is now a cherished memory. Thank you for sponsoring this brilliant contest!